Sleeping Valor

I like it. I'm looking forward to seeing where this is going. One thing I would suggest us separating your text a bit more paragraph wise. It makes it easier ...

- Currently I'm working on the concept for a world I plan to use as the setting for a few stories. In the end this will most likely be the ...

Bad: This may just be me, but i find using brackets to add detail is like saying "here's some extra information you might as well know but I don't see ...

Sounds good. Looking forward to it. The bad guys are always important, so make sure his goals are very clear and the reason why he is bad isn't obvious, that ...

>.< How can I tell you if i want more when I don't know what to expect more of?! More please. :D You do some nice work.

You shouldn't replace the original with a changed version, if you do people like me don't get to see how the story has changed T_T. Sounds interesting. I liked the ...

Okie. I went and read Atlantean 1 and 2. Your plot is fastmoving and interesting, which is good. If you spent more time describing (I'll say this again and again ...

I am sorry to say this, but i am very dissapointed in you... jk! :wink: But I must insist on more description. *demanding little person* I have no idea how ...

Interesting. The plot is definitely good and I like the whole Atlantean vs. Murchalls concept. Besides little mistakes I know must be in there somewhere, there are only a few ...

I was going to quote just the parts I liked the most, and then I realised I was actually quoting the whole thing. I loved it. It's perfect, don't change ...

I also don't usually like fighting stories, it's always hard to visualize the fight since often there isn't enough description. You, on the other hand, did a wonderful job describing ...

:shock: If i could doodle like that...i would be the happiest person in the world. I love your style and creativity, nice stuff!

I loved it! Even though there aren't many words, the emotion comes across really well. From the very beginning I got the feeling of slowly falling as the poem progressed. ...